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The Influence on Mainstram Media on Adolescents

Original post made by Annie Wu, Pleasanton Middle School, on Apr 6, 2009

To those of you who have ever doubted your own beauty, been called something you’re not because you look a certain way, or found that you can’t stray away from the messages that the media gives; this is for you:

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Posted by Doo Doo
a resident of Valley Trails
on Apr 7, 2009 at 8:53 am

Annie, I am amazed that you are only 13 years old. Your article is very well written. I have two small children and believe it or not, you have already helped them by giving me alot to think about. Good Job. Keep up the good work.


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Posted by Jordanna
a resident of Another Pleasanton neighborhood
on Apr 7, 2009 at 6:07 pm

Everything you say is true, Annie. In addition, it's sad how movies, TV and magazines tell girls that what is important about them is their bodies. Also, a girl being raped or threatened with rape is considered good entertainment, it's a part of many movies and TV shows. The way men talk about women in movies is often demeaning, and again, that's no problem for most of the American audience. Putting women and girls down, using them, objectifying them, and threatening them with sexual violence is a big part of American movies and TV shows. Sad and pathetic.


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Posted by Kathy
a resident of Pleasanton Middle School
on Apr 7, 2009 at 6:43 pm

Wow Annie, your writing is amazing. I've never really realized any of this before until the day you showed me the commercial and told me about the topic you chose. You should be really proud of yourself =)
Mrs. Melvin will be pleased XD ^-^ =)


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Posted by Emily
a resident of Pleasanton Middle School
on Apr 7, 2009 at 7:13 pm

I don't really know you, but that was like amazing. You sounded like those famous people writing in big newspapers. It was really good. Like better then good but "excellent" and "fantastic" sound kind of cheesy.


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Posted by Nayun
a resident of Pleasanton Middle School
on Apr 7, 2009 at 7:13 pm

That's some nice stuff you've written! Everything you said is true, and congratulations for getting such a head start on your project:)


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Posted by ME
a resident of Pleasanton Middle School
on Apr 7, 2009 at 7:16 pm

dude
that was like,
incredible...

i am so jealous


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Posted by Jon Hurley :D
a resident of Pleasanton Middle School
on Apr 7, 2009 at 7:55 pm

This all is true!! u did a great job writing this essay!!! i am truly impressed!!!

^-^

~Jon


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Posted by Michelle
a resident of Pleasanton Middle School
on Apr 7, 2009 at 8:28 pm

Hi Annie, i don't really know you, but I'm a friend of Diana's. You're article is amazing! It sounds like an adult wrote it. I'm also in Mrs. Melvin's class and like Kathy said, she will be very pleased. Good job! =)


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Posted by Esther Landua
a resident of another community
on Apr 7, 2009 at 8:31 pm

As the mother of a 9-year-old girl, I am keenly aware of how the media is probably affecting my daughter's self image. This isn't anything unique to this generation, though: in the 1940s and 50s, girls had to have an hour-glass shape (Betty Grable); in the 1960s, girls had to be thin and flat-chested (Twiggy); in my adolescence there was this weird combination of skinny and busty (Barbie doll) longed for.

I agree with you whole-heartedly about how the media forces an impossible expectation on girls in particular, and that girls respond by hurting themselves. As a side note, see if you notice how often fat people are the subject of jokes, both in the media and on the schoolyard. Next time you hear someone make a fat joke, see how hard it is to not join everyone laughing, and instead speak up on behalf of fat people everywhere.

Thank you for taking on our media addiction in this way. Keep it up!


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Posted by Diana
a resident of Pleasanton Middle School
on Apr 7, 2009 at 8:32 pm

Wow Annie, this was great! I am very impressed!

Your perspective and voice ring true, and your message is strong. This topic was definitely a good subject to research, especially at the age we are at right now. Some where along the way, we all get lost and lose our sight about where we want to go, who we are, and who we want to be. I think your article brings back the clarity to some of the things we lost sight of.

Best regards,
Diana


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Posted by An eigth grader? haha XD
a resident of Pleasanton Middle School
on Apr 7, 2009 at 8:53 pm

First of all, this is amazing writing *applause* ;)
Though, if you did not use contractions, it would have made this letter better. A tip is to avoid contractions as much as possible in an persuasive piece of writing. Your ending is very strong, and it will convince many readers that the media is not always the thing to follow. The beginning is another strong point, it really draws readers into your writing.Your evidence is overwhelming, and used very effectively. Overall, this is some of the best writing I've seen in a long time.
Keep up the good work!


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Posted by Kevin Rodriguez
a resident of Foothill High School
on Apr 7, 2009 at 9:00 pm

I do agree, these type of things are influencing the young ones of our society and its just not right. I think that if this goes on for much longer, you will be seeing girls and maybe even boys in elementary school that are anorexic, which can dramaticlly change their lives in the future. So i just wanted to say thank you Annie, for oppening up my mind and finally realizing the wrong and right ways. Thank you, for changing my life.

- Kevin Rodriguez -


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Posted by Anisha
a resident of Another Pleasanton neighborhood
on Apr 7, 2009 at 9:08 pm

Great job Annie! I loved what you wrote. All of the information you gave was true and we have to fix these problems in our community and around the world.


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Posted by Jacqueline Young
a resident of Pleasanton Middle School
on Apr 7, 2009 at 9:14 pm

Wow, I never realized the effects of the media on communities around the world before until I read this article, Annie. Your writing is amazing and I feel that it will touch people's lives and open their eyes to this deception.

~Jacqueline♥


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Posted by Annie
a resident of Pleasanton Middle School
on Apr 7, 2009 at 9:51 pm

Hello everyone! Thanks so much for all your support. I really appreciate it. I'm very sorry about some of the typos in my letter and thanks for all your tips. -Annie


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Posted by Connie Wu
a resident of Foothill High School
on Apr 7, 2009 at 9:58 pm

Dearest Annie,

I suppose I can't say this is news to be, since I've been watching you toil for hours on this project day after day. You've been drilling these ideas into my head for about two weeks now. Although I did not quite believe the media was such a serious issue at first, you have certainly caused it to become permanently embedded in my mind.

For example, today in Global Studies, we were discussing the detrimental effects of overpopulation, and how we, as the new generation, could solve this dilemna. Oddly (or perhaps, not so oddly), the first idea that came upon me was setting examples through the media! Honestly speaking. :)

So I hope that was some heart-warming proof that your ideas are being spread around. I'm very proud of your non-procrastinating ways. (Too bad you got the good genes.) Keep up the good work.


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Posted by UNKNOWN
a resident of Danville
on Apr 7, 2009 at 9:59 pm

Did you mean mainstream instead of mainstram? Sorry if I'm wrong, this is a very well-written article that projects a very important message.


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Posted by Sue Jin
a resident of Pleasanton Middle School
on Apr 7, 2009 at 10:16 pm

Wow Annie! That article was amazing. Before, I knew that media was a bad thing and to stay away from all those commercials. However, I did not know a lot of other facts like leading little kids to copy the same ideas as their celebrities. Just like Kathy and Michelle said, I think Mrs. Melvin will be proud of you. :)

Good luck,
Sue Jin


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Posted by Athena aka Connie's friend
a resident of Pleasanton Middle School
on Apr 7, 2009 at 10:59 pm

Annie!

Your essay was so well-written and made me ponder the differrent aspects of media's effectiveness on our generation. s


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Posted by Athena (Connie's Friend)
a resident of Rosewood
on Apr 7, 2009 at 11:05 pm

Annie!
You may know as the crazy tall one filming in beards at your house. (Haha). However, I wish you to know how extremely well-written your essay was. So much, in fact, that you made me truly ponder the different aspects of media effectiveness. Just look at all the comments you have already created on this page! This piece of excellent writing has already made an impact on your community. The media escpecially affects people my age, at the high school level. Many teens, especially girls, who are currently quite *ahem* impressionable need to read what you have written. Maybe I'm biased because Connie is an amazing writer, too, but I think you have significant talent for your age.
Love,
Athena (sorry it was long, I'm procrastinating on my Odyssey essay- Hey! Maybe you could give me some pointers... :)


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Posted by courtney
a resident of Pleasanton Middle School
on Apr 8, 2009 at 5:59 pm

Annie

Your article is really good. I agree with you on the fact that mainstream media does have a huge impact on our lives.Mrs.Melvin would definently be proud of your piece of writing. I hope you get an A on the project because you write very well. Keep researching and telling people about this problem. Again, great writing and great topic.See you at school!

Sincerely,

Courtney Seams


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Posted by person
a resident of Pleasanton Middle School
on Apr 8, 2009 at 6:54 pm

wow annie that was really good!
it sounded really professional but easy enough for younger people to understand
seems like you really know what youre talking about
thanks for the enlightenment.... lol

ok bye!


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Posted by Ashley
a resident of San Ramon
on Apr 8, 2009 at 11:53 pm

This is absolutely true! Media is affecting little minds and mostly teens. People that depend on media, for example, you said they define beauty as thin, slender, and long-legged. That is insane. You definitely have a strong opinion on this. By the way, this is way beyond terrific!


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Posted by Ashley Grey
a resident of Hacienda Gardens
on Apr 9, 2009 at 3:46 pm

Annie- this is amazing for a seventh grader! The service learning project sounds like a great project, and your writing is amazing for your age. Your article for media attention is very deep, and I will think about the influence of media when I am raising my five- year- old girl who idolizes Miley Cyrus.
Thank You for your advice!
Ashley


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Posted by Vickie
a resident of Pleasanton Middle School
on Apr 13, 2009 at 12:07 pm

That was AWESOME!!

Your article will have a positive influence on everyone who reads it. Mrs. Melvin will be very very very proud. ^-^




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